Post by Rain on Jul 22, 2006 9:48:24 GMT -5
This is only part of the first paragraph I want to know what you people think so far. Please any critic is welcome.
I will be posting parts piece by piece.
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Walking through the luscious green grass, light shown down on Soulless's beautiful white and silver pelt. The sun was bright about mid day in the lower part of The South Ever Glades Forest. Wind blew from the east, creating her fur to ruffle as she ventured across the grassy plain. She gave a quiet grunt and held her head low to the ground looking up over the tall grass only to see if there were followers.Soulless had been panting heavily due to days of travel and no sleep. Her muscles where cramped and she could hardly trot but she keep going. She wasn't a quitter. Her legs thrust forward as her pace slowed. Soulless held her dry black nose the air and took in the breezes. She had sensed it before but now it was closer.
I will be posting parts piece by piece.
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Walking through the luscious green grass, light shown down on Soulless's beautiful white and silver pelt. The sun was bright about mid day in the lower part of The South Ever Glades Forest. Wind blew from the east, creating her fur to ruffle as she ventured across the grassy plain. She gave a quiet grunt and held her head low to the ground looking up over the tall grass only to see if there were followers.Soulless had been panting heavily due to days of travel and no sleep. Her muscles where cramped and she could hardly trot but she keep going. She wasn't a quitter. Her legs thrust forward as her pace slowed. Soulless held her dry black nose the air and took in the breezes. She had sensed it before but now it was closer.
